Poetry Assistance Please

I don't really consider myself a poet. But, I have to write some poems for school, so I was hoping I could perhaps get some feedback from you guys.

I hope you like bad poetry, lol.


Here are some:

The Purpuric Cup
Ambiguity
Putrid beauty
Night shade, flora
Pinot noir
Sinuous knot
Ever unfolding
Stuck inside
A ball of yarn
Oh, vagueness above
Life’s lascivious hug
Giving slight decoration
‘For we become thereof
Most curious plum
Your thread’s never undone
Amaranthine orchid
To undying love

*That was supposed to be a color poem I think


Nice Dream
Wrapping wide arms around the sun and pushing it into my stomach
Dries up tiny lakes
Blots out sky
Seeps warmth through tense hands
Or feet, at them
Waves break stars down to sand
Patches and patches
Of bright
Decorating the very pith of the eyelids
Flickering
Shapes
Dancing lights teasingly
Tickling at my face
“Don’t wake,” a distant voice whispers.
“Don’t wake.”



Here's the craziest one:

Fear Pixel
He closed his eyes and tried to balance with one leg
On the hood of your autonomous car
Terra’s satellite was blurred like an arrow
Shooting across inactive monitors
Winds rushed by with velocity as a virus
Destroying organized desktops
Caught in the net,
Expressionless lips were a digital
But
That ( ) was…
Where each user owned a mouse
And signed peace \ / over its body
Before pressing their fingers down _
{[Squashing the living guts out]}
That ( )
Which now remains as a mirage of funny cat pictures.

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Thanks for any help I can get!

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That is a style of poetry I'm not familiar with and it's kind of hard for me to follow.

sorry that I couldn't be of more help, Tea...

My style is short rhyming stuff

Mary had a little dress,
short, white and airy
Never showed a speck of dirt
But showed a lot of Mary

^^^Not my work, but an example of the style

Good friend, Tea
Has a question
But, I couldn't help
In this connection!!!

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Post last edited by husky51 on 03.07.2014, 11:32 AM.