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I just wonder if the "earth" would be engulfed by the "sun"? As having no rotation the planet can be forced out of its orbit by the centripetal force and crash itself into the sun. Anyway it is a fictitious world I should not take these too serious. So just let your imaginations fly!

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I read some scientific facts and thought about it. After 3 months of serious thinking, I came to a conclusion and said to myself: "It's not that irrelevant!" Besides, there won't be any scenes in the film, which clearly state this bizarre phenomenon. After all, for the characters in the story, it is as routine as our visit to the Moon. My vision may sound slightly more unrealistic, but I doubt that'll be the biggest concern right now...

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In fact your story is quite original and the environment of the world is interesting. And I am impressed with the drawing too. You must have spent a long time in planning the story and developing the plots. I cannot wait to see all the sections . But just take your time, and start with those you are convenient with.

By the way is the "Iris" drawing in your DA gallery also a part of the story?

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Thanks for your support!

I'll take the character-part next then. The Iris is supposed to be part of the story, but for now I haven't found a place for it. The last third of the story takes place in a frozen land, where the drawing would be most suited with.

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I'll take the character-part next then. The Iris is supposed to be part of the story, but for now I haven't found a place for it. The last third of the story takes place in a frozen land, where the drawing would be most suited with.

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They seem to be awesome . Can't wait to see them.

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The Protagonists:

Eishi (14):

Eishi has a silver scaled skin, so his roots are somewhere in the dark side of the world. He's also got deep eye-sockets and a black to silvery coloured back hair. He's relatively short for his age, but that doesn't really bother him.

The boy lived his early childhood in an orphanage. It's a bit mystery how he actually ended up there, nor does he recall of having any parents. He's a good-natured person, though he has a tired and weary look on his face. It's mostly because of his tragical childhood, when he used to cry a lot. Living in an orphanage was especially hard for him, since he was quite a sickly one back then.

Currently Eishi lives at Yoko's grandma's house, until he grows old enough to live in a homestead of his own. He works at the lower layer, in the harbor, where he mostly assists old fishermen and cleans boats. As you could expect, his biggest dream for him would be to leave the floating town one day, and go sailing to the unknown.

(Trivia: there isn't any kind of currency in Floating town, just some strict regulations).

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Yoko (22):

Yoko has a golden scaled skin, and is related to the ones living in the light side of the world. Her face is extraordinary 'conglomerated', as she had a face of a 4-year old child. Her golden hair is rather short and it glitters a bit.

Eishi's best friend, Yoko, lived a plentiful childhood, since her parents are part of the floating town's adminstration, and thus they receive some privileges compared to the other residents. Her parents are absent for the most part of the time, and Yoko spends little time with them. Usually she assists her grandma at the house, while she's seeing Eishi.

Yoko met Eishi in the orphanage, when she was babysitting its young residents, at the age of 12. That was the beginning of their dear friendship, although it was somewhat tragic. Eishi bewailed all day long his sad fate, until one day Yoko confronted him. Eishi had a fiever that day, nevertheless she helped him out of his misery, and from that day everything has been more or less calm.

(Trivia: the overall reason to have an orphanage in the floating town has to do with the cruel world of adults. It's not very rare to hear one's parents having died to a disease or coldness/heat.)

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Important characters:

Formless (??):

Formless has no shape whatsoever, and is like a trapped soul without a shell. It consists of pure energy with consciousness, and those two factors are the basics for self-assertion. Formless is a being captived to a place and time and can only observe.

Formless can only wait for a shell to be taken. Shell can be any kind of non-organic materia, which this strange matter would then turn into an organic being. The morphing process itself is swift, but it takes some time for veins, muscles and organs to develop for optimal action.

Young Formless energy would be only passive materia, but the older they get, more they develop their own nature and goals. Yet, the ultimate purpose for Formless is to connect a link between the dead and alive.

The first confrontation to the Formless is, when the being "takes over" Eishi's flying lantern among thausands of other similar ones. This is naturally by no means a coincidence and is also the story's first turning-point.

(Trivia: The flying lanterns give hope for those who have recently passed away. The wind also tells omens to its sender. The early extinguishment of the candle brings bad omen, while the lantern's late setting on roary flames changes fate. Otherwise everything stays the same).

TO BE CONTINUED...

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Post last edited by Azhur on 02.28.2005, 12:21 PM.

It is interesting to have scales on the body.

Anyway does your story has any antagonist? Or follow the no-antagonist approach like what is in the story of Kiki or Totoro?

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i like the start to your story

hello fellow human. I found your idea to have scales on your people quite origninal. I would like to know more about your people and thier history in your story I was wondering if they would leave there floating city I am knew here and I would like to read more

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Well if there's gonna be any antagonist, it'll be more or less the harsh mother nature at the last third. Cold death covers all over the northern permafrost, and the people who live there symbolize hope and determination to survive.

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This fits quite well into the style and structure of Miyazaki's stories. I am glad that your story is not based on those conventional Hollywood "'goodie vs badie' + CG/explosive action + soap drama romance" formula.

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Hello fellow human. I found your idea to have scales on your people quite origninal. I would like to know more about your people and thier history in your story I was wondering if they would leave there floating city I am knew here and I would like to read more

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Post last edited by Azhur on 05.12.2005, 05:13 AM.

The time part is a bit complicated. But that's okay. I think everything will be well explained in the content of your story.

By the way here is a must-read for anyone who wish to be a Ghibli animator. I think I can post the link here as the topic of this thread is about making animation.

http://www.nausicaa.net/miyazaki/sen/breathing.html

P.S. The page is in nausicaa.net but you can never find it by using their own internal links. The site is a great reserve of gems, but would be even better if they can make a decent site map that covers at least 90% of their content.

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The time part is a bit complicated. But that's okay. I think everything will be well explained in the content of your story.

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Post last edited by Azhur on 03.19.2005, 01:37 AM.

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I'm glad for not working as an animator in Ghibli... it's probably one of the most stressful jobs there is.

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Yea. This article is great for knocking anyone off the dream of being a Ghibli animator.

I have heard that Ghibli is the most respected Studio in Japan for its great works. However, almost every animator respects it at a distance, and does not really want to work inside there for the rest of their life. Other studios are by far more free and more relaxed. And the supervisors there are more like colleagues, while Miyazaki of Ghibli always acts like a parent/commander.

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I got stories too ^^

I make so many stories and I either wright them or turn them into comics my comic that still has alot of people interested is called Reiko Hinohara ^^ the main character was in a dream I had so I made a story just for her . . .when I dream I dream stories! I have two new stories I dreamt Tunoehem , and Cowgirl Lily both very good ideas if you want to hear about one ill send you the plot ^^

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I make so many stories and I either wright them or turn them into comics my comic that still has alot of people interested is called Reiko Hinohara ^^ the main character was in a dream I had so I made a story just for her . . .when I dream I dream stories! I have two new stories I dreamt Tunoehem , and Cowgirl Lily both very good ideas if you want to hear about one ill send you the plot ^^

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Sure, I'd like to hear the plot.

Landscapes:

Having said that I don't really have enough time or recources to make my own landscapes, I've taken some examples from deviantart. These show only the flesh of the story, so you have to wait for the core for now.

Floating Town

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/13629515/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/11672087/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/14458773/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/13576538/ (Dark Side)
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15488841/

Formless Nave

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15460303/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/14708271/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/14667863/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/11446268/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/16154809/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/16147192/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/13329065/


Eternal Permafrost

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/12064175/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/13706854/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/12588830/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15553729/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/10475154/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/11643570/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/13933306/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/10913715/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/14917090/
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15471741/

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Post last edited by Azhur on 04.01.2005, 04:40 AM.

Wow your drawings are really fabulous. Actually have you considered drawing a picture-book-esque manga, like Miyazaki's "Journey of Shuna"? I am sure it would be amazing. (and also truly cool 8] )

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Wow your drawings are really fabulous. Actually have you considered drawing a picture-book-esque manga, like Miyazaki's "Journey of Shuna"? I am sure it would be amazing. (and also truly cool 8] )

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Post last edited by Azhur on 03.31.2005, 01:58 PM.

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Not counting the first picture those aren't my drawings, just various sources of inspirations made by other people. Deviantart is a great place to find new ambiences, because of its dedication to bring forth others works. My skills with pencil aren't really up for making a lengthy manga, so all the credits to Miyazaki's determination and talent.

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Oh sorry for the misunderstandings . Attention and sanity usually wanders away after the midnight .

I do look forward to know more about your story. (and see more drawings from you )

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A Screenplay Sample

"The story begins with a DREAM SEQUENCE. We see main character Eishi's P.O.V, as he flies trough the afternoon sky. Though the sun is still shining, it cannot be seen yet, since it’s behind thick clouds. They reflect purple color and it’s like the whole sky would be in flames. Only one distant sound echoes in the sky, THE SILENTLY BLOWING WIND. Slowly we move trough dense clouds and in the end reach a very deep one. For a moment we can only see dark greyish mist, but in the end the colossal sun reveals. It’s unreal huge and shines bright orange color, which is really disturbing. We still keep moving towards the fiery ball and keep accelerating in a considerate speed. Though we move trough the atmosphere until the space reached, the sun is still same sized. Finally the sun flares white light and

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INT. EISHI'S ROOM – SUNRISE

INDETERMINATE WOODEN MACHINERY RUMBLING

The first impression of Eishi's room seems to be much like a medieval storeroom with bricked walls. It’s overall quite simplistic with one bed, a mirror, a worn-out closet and a table. Yet the room includes many objects here and there; rugged clothes hanging from a string, a wooden bucket filled with somewhat dirty water, ropes going trough the walls, a rusty bell on the table, torrid flowers on the window sill and an extinguished candle beside the bed.

The sun shine reflects from the window to the wall mirror and again straight to Eishi's eyes. He’s about to wake up in. He slowly stirs his eyes as the brightness disturbs him. Eishi rubs his eyes. He almost jumps off the bed and accidently overturns the candle. He swiftly picks up the wooden bucket.

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A number of fast cuts: Eishi takes a shower by pumping water trough a wooden aqueduct into a bucket and pours water over himself. He cleans his teeth with a wetted piece of coral. He takes gloves from the string in his room and wooden shoes from his closet. Finally he takes a sip of an unknown drink from a mug and is about to leave the apartment. At the front door he hears SNORING (Yoko's grandma). Eishi HEAVES A SIGH and slowly opens the front door. Red light breathes in."

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TO BE CONTINUED...

Having written this, I see now the importance of the sketches and especially storyboard. There's details after details, and it's truly frustfrating to write em all down.

EDIT: Soon to be edited; too much 'wooden' and Eishi really doesn't dress up completely.

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Post last edited by Azhur on 04.07.2005, 04:23 AM.

It may seem strange to talk about ending at this point, but this is one of the clearest ones in my mind.

The Ending

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/9933516/

Before the ending Yoko and Eishi got seperated, but at the very end they're back together. That particular house (again not my crafted) is Eishi's actual home. What the picture doesn't show that it's actually a modern house, though the story has been before set in a medieval world. Yoko and Eishi make their last bittersweet goodbyes.

This indicates that whole journey between Yoko and Eishi could have been only "third person's" imagination. There might have actually been an average kid gotten into a coma and (s)he is about to pass away as an elder. The journey from Floating Town to Eternal Permafrost actually symbolizes his/her final expedition to confront death and to meet his already deceased parents.

Yet after Eishi has entered the house, the story continues. Formless' latest form was a frozen statue -- now having completed his task (bring Eishi home) Formless finally gains an angelic form. Formed grabs depressed Yoko with him/her and flies back to Floating Town.

A long scene showing Yoko returning to FT with Formless help. Yoko's feelings vary between melancholy and sadness.

The floating town itself has stayed unchanged, but Yoko isn't herself anymore. She's developed into a more serious person. It's raining heavily in FT. A long distance shot showing Yoko crying to her grandma's shoulder (her parents are still absent).

Yoko is in Eishi's room and sits on his bed while glancing over the room. Rain pours heavily to the lone window. Yoko starts to rest on the bed and finally falls asleep.

Yoko's dream Sequence: compare to Eishi's dream sequence -- there are several differences.

- This time it's grim and raining
- Instead of going to the Sun she goes for the full Moon
- The dream continues in pitch blackness with these Eishi's whispered words:
"We'll meet again."

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The Ending Titles:

As said before the Floating Town wanders all the same places where Eishi and Yoko visited trough generations. Finally Floating Town halts into a massive piece of ice and freezes into its position.

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Post last edited by Azhur on 04.12.2005, 04:06 AM.

Your story seems to be quite mature. The whole idea is pretty good. There are a few points that I cannot follow. But after all I have only read the beginning and the end of the story.

So are you going to draw some sketches or storyboards?

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Your story seems to be quite mature. The whole idea is pretty good. There are a few points that I cannot follow. But after all I have only read the beginning and the end of the story.

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Post last edited by Azhur on 04.09.2005, 05:40 AM.